On a Sunday afternoon, Peter sat quietly on his rocking chair. He seemed as peaceful as anyone could ever be, but he was not. Peter was exhausted, tired of everything. He reminisced about what he went through this past week. It was too overwhelming for him to cope with the shock. His little girl, Rachel, was gone. Peter could feel his hands trembling just by thinking of her daughter being locked in a room by herself and threatened by the abductors that took her. It was hard for Peter to accept that there was nothing that he could do for his daughter. All he could do is wait for a phone call from the police. He felt guilty for not being there to save his own daughter. He felt as if this was his fault. He was scared that he would Rachel, and that this would be his fault. He remembered the police telling him that 99% of the abducted children die in the first 24 hours. Peter knew that one week as already passed and he had 1% chance, but he didn't want to give up. He couldn't. Peter told himself once again that he would do anything to get his baby daughter back. After a motionless moment, Peter stood up, called the police, once again urging them to find his daughter.
Jason: I really felt Peter's plight in this story. Good job conveying the intense emotions that typically follow a child abduction. It is so sad though! It is true that most kidnappings end up with the child's death within the first few hours, but stranger things have happened. I really hope Peter finds Rachel.
On a Sunday afternoon, Peter sat quietly on his rocking chair. He seemed as peaceful as anyone could ever be, but he was not. Peter was exhausted, tired of everything. He reminisced about what he went through this past week. It was too overwhelming for him to cope with the shock. His little girl, Rachel, was gone. Peter could feel his hands trembling just by thinking of her daughter being locked in a room by herself and threatened by the abductors that took her. It was hard for Peter to accept that there was nothing that he could do for his daughter. All he could do is wait for a phone call from the police. He felt guilty for not being there to save his own daughter. He felt as if this was his fault. He was scared that he would Rachel, and that this would be his fault. He remembered the police telling him that 99% of the abducted children die in the first 24 hours. Peter knew that one week as already passed and he had 1% chance, but he didn't want to give up. He couldn't. Peter told himself once again that he would do anything to get his baby daughter back. After a motionless moment, Peter stood up, called the police, once again urging them to find his daughter.
Jason: I really felt Peter's plight in this story. Good job conveying the intense emotions that typically follow a child abduction. It is so sad though! It is true that most kidnappings end up with the child's death within the first few hours, but stranger things have happened. I really hope Peter finds Rachel.